I find your muses delightful. I think my only complaints, voice wise, are minor ones. They both come off as a little overly mild sometimes. With Daryl, I would like to see his more abrasive side played up a little more. I know you've got an opt out for his more coarser behaviors so you may be hesitant to offend people, but I think there are fewer delicate sensibilities than the anon comms would suggest.
Writing wise, there are two small things you could work on. The first is the multiple conversations in one post thing. It gets a little tedious when Muse A asks four questions and your muse answers all four of them in sequence like they're having four complete conversations. That's not all on you, because it's kind of bad writing on their part to be puking up four questions at you without giving you a chance to answer the earlier ones, but I thought it was worth noting. Sometimes, it's okay to skip the earlier parts to answer the most recent, like most conversations. You could even have Sam or Daryl -think- how rude it was not to give him a chance to answer the others, if you're feeling snarky.
The other is that I've noticed sometimes you tend to repeat back a large chunk of what the previous comment says. I'm not sure how to best phrase this, but I think it's an effort on your part to make sure you address everything and react to what all is happening, but it reads less like a reaction and more like a repetition. I don't have a link handy, but it seems to happen more in the smut threads than his general CR.
I hope none of this sounds harsh. I think you're a wonderful player and I think your muses are wonderful. It's just a few things I noticed while reading your threads, but it's certainly not enough to put me off wanting to tag with you.
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Writing wise, there are two small things you could work on. The first is the multiple conversations in one post thing. It gets a little tedious when Muse A asks four questions and your muse answers all four of them in sequence like they're having four complete conversations. That's not all on you, because it's kind of bad writing on their part to be puking up four questions at you without giving you a chance to answer the earlier ones, but I thought it was worth noting. Sometimes, it's okay to skip the earlier parts to answer the most recent, like most conversations. You could even have Sam or Daryl -think- how rude it was not to give him a chance to answer the others, if you're feeling snarky.
The other is that I've noticed sometimes you tend to repeat back a large chunk of what the previous comment says. I'm not sure how to best phrase this, but I think it's an effort on your part to make sure you address everything and react to what all is happening, but it reads less like a reaction and more like a repetition. I don't have a link handy, but it seems to happen more in the smut threads than his general CR.
I hope none of this sounds harsh. I think you're a wonderful player and I think your muses are wonderful. It's just a few things I noticed while reading your threads, but it's certainly not enough to put me off wanting to tag with you.